General
He was a jolly man with a jolly face, a jolly smile and a jolly belly. He has cheeks as red as roses, a snow white beard and a mop of silvery-white hair on top of his head. He only wore red, a red top, a red coat, red pants and a red hat with a perfect puffed pompom on top. He4 wore big black boots and his large stomach hung over his big black belt because he’s been eating too many cookies. All his clothes have a fluffy white lining and a big brown sack was hanging over his shoulder.
Specific
A cloud of ash appeared as he came barrelling down the chimney like a massive cannonball. A figure appeared in front of me. He ducked to avoid the low overhang of bricks as he climbed out of the fireplace, pulling a big brown sack out behind him. His belly seemed to fill the whole room. His face was blackened with ash but you could still see his cherry red cheeks bulging out from the rest of his face. He had small wrinkles at the edges of his mouth that told me he had been smiling a lot. He had a long white beard and a mop of hair the same colour. His bright eyes had a twinkle in them and stood out against the rest of his blacky-brown face. He put something down by the Christmas tree and headed for the chimney. He seemed to fly straight up to the top without touching the sides. The magic in the room was gone.
Luke - Room 6
How sad you would be if his magic didn't appear every year! Thoughtful writing, Luke.
ReplyDeleteMrs D.
Luke, you really are a talented writer - well done!
ReplyDeleteMrs Murphy